RWP#49: Hobbyhorse, hobbyhorse (A Paradelle)
Thursday, October 23rd @ 1:27 pm
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Hobbyhorse, Hobbyhorse (A Paradelle)
Every letter in the preaching scribed-
Every letter in the preaching scribed-
Truths formerly barred, allowed by this recharter.
Truths formerly barred, allowed by this recharter.
The scribed truths in this letter barred,
Every recharter formerly allowed by preaching.
Imperfect results sent turbo up the chain,
Imperfect results sent turbo up the chain,
Flooding the inbox of the falsifier of records.
Flooding the inbox of the falsifier of records.
Turbo flooding sent up the inbox. The records imperfect.
Chain of results. Of the falsifier.
What is called a guide is astraddle a hobbyhorse.
What is called a guide is astraddle a hobbyhorse.
Replying to dismay, he had sportingly offered a refund.
Replying to dismay, he had sportingly offered a refund.
A called guide is replying sportingly to what refund?
Astraddle dismay, he is offered a had hobbyhorse
The recharter is astraddle a barred dismay.
The hobbyhorse guide is called, allowed by
Imperfect truths formerly in the inbox of preaching.
This letter turbo-scribed is a what? Results falsifier.
Every chain had records replying to flooding
Sportingly sent, the refund he offered up of the A.
The Read Write Prompt for this week was to use echolalia as the “hinge” of the poem. The wikipedia description of immediate echolalia seemed suggestive of certain poetic uses of repetition and it occurred to me the paradelle, as a form, seemed kind of echolalaic (anyone?). And, because I like to surprise myself when I write, I headed to WatchOut4Snakes and used their random word generator to get some “seed” words. Anyway, other people’s variously echolalaic or ekphrastic poems will be shared here.
Briefly, regarding the paradelle, they are tough. Not so much to write (unlike, say, a sonnet), but to write well.
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I don’t like the form, however, I feel you made good use of the echolalia prompt with the repeating, echoing nature of this paradelle.
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I’d never heard of the paradelle and followed your wikipedia link – hilarious! I love it! Definitely appropriate. :)
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Writing a paradelle is no cakewalk. You did very well with it!
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it is a great effect, not only because of the full line repetitions but also alliteration and he double consonants that I like the most.
That’s so funny — I was going to use the Random Word Generator for this prompt, although not the paradelle, I’ve never heard of that one. This poem is a blast.
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The Paradelle isn’t a form I particularly care for. Collins’ “Paradelle for Susan” is, I think, quite good, but real quality in it is… challenging. And, of course, the whole thing was a joke to begin with.
Kind of like “echolalia” that way/ I mean, sure, we’re probably all liberal poet-bloggers who want to be nice and all that jazz, but if somebody was echolalaic, wouldn’t you laugh? You’d try not to, and you’d feel bad later. So….
Part of it is the word. It’s hard to take greek seriously: it sounds like toddlers babbling. Call it a syndrome if you want it taken seriously. Give it acronymic letters.
But writing a good paradelle is a very difficult task because not just the lines need to stand up to repetition, but the words. And reshuffling the words adds a level of complexity that reinforces Collins point when creating the paradelle- sometimes the rules are dumb.