On the joys of sharing a dorm room
The whisper of skin on skin-
Lines of moonlight cast
through the blinds
tickling the curve of her back-
The fragrance of beer,
cigarettes and latex.
I don’t think they can see the scowl
as I put in the earplugs.
This was a response to Carolee’s prompt to “watch” something we’re not supposed to see. Incidentally, at the top of the window in which I worked on this I had typed: “GAAAAHHHHHHH!!!!!! I cannot think in verse!” Check out the other people who have taken a look!
Note: I’ve never shared a dorm room nor watched anyone else have sex. One of the joys of the arts is imagining situations. “Write what you know” can be rather limiting sometimes.
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“The fragrance of beer, / cigarettes and latex.” I love when a poet can get the whole world in a line or two. Well done.
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Beautifully compact evocation!
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My favorite line is “the smell of beer, cigarettes, and latex, but the whole poem is spot on. I understand the need for a disclaimer, I wrote one too, although I try not to confuse the artist with the art. :-)
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Like others, the beer line is spot on. It encapsulates the scene perfectly. This is has the greatest impact.
what a great place to take this prompt!!! very creative.
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Thanks, everyone, for taking the time to read and/or comment here. It is appreciated.
The beer line went through several revisions, so I’m glad people enjoy it. It’s interesting, to me, the creative process. Half-finishing a line, deleting, rewriting, etc. until the line is finished (for the moment) and ushered out to the world. I don’t know how anyone else writes, or for that matter how I write. Is that normal, to pick apart each line as you go? Or do most people wait until the whole poem is written?