Comments on: Read Write Poem #3: Sparkles http://fallenverses.org/2007/12/02/read-write-poem-3-three-pieces/ Wed, 07 Jan 2009 20:45:22 +0000 hourly 1 By: tom http://fallenverses.org/2007/12/02/read-write-poem-3-three-pieces/comment-page-1/#comment-299 tom Fri, 07 Dec 2007 02:24:09 +0000 http://fallenverses.org/2007/12/02/read-write-poem-3-three-pieces/#comment-299 At least it inspired commenting, but I swear I was not fishing. I wasn't. At least it inspired commenting, but I swear I was not fishing. I wasn’t.

]]> By: Rethabile http://fallenverses.org/2007/12/02/read-write-poem-3-three-pieces/comment-page-1/#comment-298 Rethabile Wed, 05 Dec 2007 23:08:02 +0000 http://fallenverses.org/2007/12/02/read-write-poem-3-three-pieces/#comment-298 Enjoyed the read. Enjoyed the read.

]]> By: blackeyedsusan http://fallenverses.org/2007/12/02/read-write-poem-3-three-pieces/comment-page-1/#comment-297 blackeyedsusan Mon, 03 Dec 2007 22:30:47 +0000 http://fallenverses.org/2007/12/02/read-write-poem-3-three-pieces/#comment-297 Twice divorced and shiny. The last two lines still have me thinking. I think some of us lose our identity in marriage and we mistakenly assume divorce is the loss. I don't see the world cold because she's put away her rings. I think she woke up and is shining. I am not sure cold is intended to imply something negative about her. Maybe it's cold like an ivorgorating cold shower. Twice divorced and shiny. The last two lines still have me thinking. I think some of us lose our identity in marriage and we mistakenly assume divorce is the loss. I don’t see the world cold because she’s put away her rings. I think she woke up and is shining. I am not sure cold is intended to imply something negative about her. Maybe it’s cold like an ivorgorating cold shower.

]]> By: mariacristina http://fallenverses.org/2007/12/02/read-write-poem-3-three-pieces/comment-page-1/#comment-296 mariacristina Mon, 03 Dec 2007 19:04:34 +0000 http://fallenverses.org/2007/12/02/read-write-poem-3-three-pieces/#comment-296 I agree with Ceridwen and Jo. You are too critical. There's a mystery here - why she left her rings, yet she still shines out in that cold world. Maybe that's why the world is cold. I agree with Ceridwen and Jo. You are too critical.
There’s a mystery here - why she left her rings, yet she still shines out in that cold world. Maybe that’s why the world is cold.

]]> By: Linda Jacobs http://fallenverses.org/2007/12/02/read-write-poem-3-three-pieces/comment-page-1/#comment-295 Linda Jacobs Mon, 03 Dec 2007 16:16:40 +0000 http://fallenverses.org/2007/12/02/read-write-poem-3-three-pieces/#comment-295 I like it just the way it is. Some of the lines surprised and made me slow down to contemplate them. I like it just the way it is. Some of the lines surprised and made me slow down to contemplate them.

]]> By: polkadotwitch http://fallenverses.org/2007/12/02/read-write-poem-3-three-pieces/comment-page-1/#comment-294 polkadotwitch Mon, 03 Dec 2007 14:47:59 +0000 http://fallenverses.org/2007/12/02/read-write-poem-3-three-pieces/#comment-294 i think you conveyed the "hiding" very well. and beneath many shining images. i think you conveyed the “hiding” very well. and beneath many shining images.

]]> By: paisley http://fallenverses.org/2007/12/02/read-write-poem-3-three-pieces/comment-page-1/#comment-293 paisley Mon, 03 Dec 2007 14:02:19 +0000 http://fallenverses.org/2007/12/02/read-write-poem-3-three-pieces/#comment-293 makes me wonder if we are not just human m&m's,,, hiding behind our shiny colorful candy coatings..... very well done... makes me wonder if we are not just human m&m’s,,, hiding behind our shiny colorful candy coatings…..

very well done…

]]> By: eatsbugs http://fallenverses.org/2007/12/02/read-write-poem-3-three-pieces/comment-page-1/#comment-292 eatsbugs Mon, 03 Dec 2007 13:44:50 +0000 http://fallenverses.org/2007/12/02/read-write-poem-3-three-pieces/#comment-292 There is lots in this one. "These months in the box,/unseen." Very telling. I like it. There is lots in this one. “These months in the box,/unseen.” Very telling. I like it.

]]> By: Jo http://fallenverses.org/2007/12/02/read-write-poem-3-three-pieces/comment-page-1/#comment-291 Jo Mon, 03 Dec 2007 09:34:35 +0000 http://fallenverses.org/2007/12/02/read-write-poem-3-three-pieces/#comment-291 I also love the last three lines. I also love the last three lines.

]]> By: gautami http://fallenverses.org/2007/12/02/read-write-poem-3-three-pieces/comment-page-1/#comment-290 gautami Mon, 03 Dec 2007 08:27:16 +0000 http://fallenverses.org/2007/12/02/read-write-poem-3-three-pieces/#comment-290 I like it all... :D I like it all…

:D

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