fallen verses

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5 Comments so far

1. 
   1 Rambler on September 27, 2007 12:04 pm

   every time I read this I make something new out of it,
   excellent poetry

   trample discarded roses, what could be they…
   thousand leather shoes, who could be they

2. 
   2 gautami tripathy on September 27, 2007 12:19 pm

   What a picture painted for so short a verse! Thanks!

3. 
   3 Tumblewords on September 27, 2007 1:07 pm

   Poignant, provocative and perfect! Love the color contrast and the words that take on new meaning with each reading.

4. 
   4 deb on September 27, 2007 3:43 pm

   The simplicity is just right

5. 
   5 Sara on November 4, 2007 4:06 pm

   Very vivid imagery. The first line is my favorite because you pack so much into three words. I still have not figured out how to do more with less in my work.